IS this story any good?

love it!please help me with my really short storym it is so short and all i need from everyone is their opinion. thank you-kaya href="http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AmVZd2aSNdqjt0.I5XCKT9zsy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20081104162404AAltPEF"http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;…/a